There I was, at work, writing away on my current work in progress, A Ghastly Gillion Stars. At the back of my mind, I felt something was off a little with the story, despite this being my second big draft. This new version was a bit different than the first draft. I dropped the focus to the two main characters, Kreek and Tybis. I wanted it to be more their story than anything. But in doing so, I trimmed, out of necessity, some of the initial big picture. And that had unexpected consequences, in that the main thrust of the story, the primary conflict, was lost until chapter four.
In looking at that, I realized that just couldn’t stand. I had to bring that big picture to the front. Had to introduce it right away. I’ve constructed it so billions of lives are at stake, as is the future of the entire Shiss race. And only the main character, Kreek, is fully aware of those stakes. It is her story, her conflict. Her decision to do what she thinks has to be done, even though billions of her fellow Shiss might very well die. I think I’ve built that part of the story well enough. Now, I have to make it the main focus.
So. I think my new chapter four may very well have to become the next chapter one. It introduces two of the main characters, Kreek and her friend Pench. It centers around Kreek and her illicit communications with another race, which Pench makes happen. It’s the result of that communication that starts the ball rolling. Adding Tybis into the mix after that process will have a much larger impact. Making it so that Kreek views Tybis as a tool, a thing that allows her to accomplish her goals, devastating as they may be, will only add to the central emotional wrangle. I think I’ve found the part of this story that’s been bugging me quite a bit, and after a night’s thought, I’ve also determined how best to fix it all. And I think this will work.
Now, do I put all these changes into effect immediately, or keep writing this second draft? I’m thinking change, myself. Because if what I envision right now works out, this will be a lot more fun to write. And it will make for a much stronger story. So, change it is. Meaning I’m on to what will amount to be the third big revision. I’ll keep you posted.